I need help with my conclusion?

Sooo the first 3 paragraphs are awesome, but my last one is random babbling right now (i've been writing for the sake of writing). If I do well on this, my grade goes up to an 89.5% (A). Constructive criticism would be awesome right now!



By day, I am a student, an employee, a friend, a teenager. By night, I am a warrior, fighting the downfall of the English language. I refuse to stand by while “OMG” and “LOL” are being added to the 2011 Oxford dictionary; before we know it, English will be as dead as Latin. The only remedy to this problem is to take a vow of abstinence from acronyms, text in complete sentences, and use punctuation marks – the kind not required to create smiley faces. As prevalent as text talk has become, the most common sound heard within American society today isn’t a word at all – it’s a bleep. We all know the words underneath the monotone sound or the random characters meant to mask an expletive, so who are we trying to protect? We try so hard to keep our conversations politically correct: heaven forbid little Johnny says the **** word, or the British secret service’s randomly generated code name for Obama happens to be the American equivalent to “Smart Alec”. Isn’t it possible that we’re bleeping out the very words that can cause pivotal change within our society? Can’t expletives, labels, and stereotypes be positive things?



Modern day censorship not only fails to protect small children, but destroys global societies one country at a time. Pakistan? Osama Bin Laden’s pornography stash just proves that censoring women and idealizing them as chaste creatures only promotes male lust and aggression. Bin Laden claimed to fight in the name of Islam, yet Islam is fundamentally opposed to his principles (both violent and pornographic). China? “Google-ing” the word “freedom” will yield approximately zero results. The government’s attempt to curb any anti-establishment sentiments consists of screening phone calls, emails, and online searches while cloaking these intrusions as Google technical difficulties. Denmark? The Danish Bible Society translated the bible to “modern Danish” for young children to be able to understand it. “Blissful” becomes “happy”, “blessed” becomes “lucky”, yet the Danish youth seem to have no problem conquering 700 page Harry Potter books. How can we continue to believe that censorship has benefits?



Although censorship may seem necessary in front of your boss or at the local daycare, we’re actually failing to see the benefits of the lack of censorship. Negative labels, such as a diagnosis, can help you attain the help you need, stereotyping has been scientifically proven to increase the human ability to multitask, and swearing increases pain tolerance (who knew?). Self-proclaimed “Tiger Mom”, Amy Chua, has no problem telling her kids that they’re “garbage” or that they’re “lazy.” Now her oldest daughter is deciding between attending Yale and Harvard while her youngest was chosen to play with the Norwalk Symphony Orchestra. So why can’t we all achieve the same level of success? Because we’re too damn polite. No one wants to hear the truth anymore, which is why obesity is an epidemic, students are receiving W’s (warnings) instead of F’s, and we’re so intrigued by the fantasy world of Harry Potter books (the Danish aren’t the only ones). Political correctness and self-censorship have turned the game of life into a game of bumper bowling – we’re handing out A’s for effort because we’re too afraid to hand out criticism, which only earns us an F for fruition in the end.



According to Tim O’Brien, we “[use] a hard vocabulary”, but what happens when we don’t have enough words left to comprise a vocabulary altogether? As I continue arguing against acronyms, I realize that the real problem isn’t the abbreviation of words, it’s society’s eradication of them. After all, even profanity has its individualistic meanings that can’t be categorized as a single “bleep”.I need help with my conclusion?
Excellent!!! Well said and well presented. Please allow me to add this. You can use it or not but it is worth saying.



The problem with politically correct speech is, it is politically correct. Any resemblance it bears to the truth is merely coincidental. Politically correct speech is not meant to be helpful or informative. It is designed to lead people to believe in a political ideology.



Free speech means you will hear both good and bad ideas and can choose between them. Government censorship means you hear only that which the government wants you to hear. Instead of multiple ideas you get one. Take it or leave it. How can you choose the other side of the argument when you never hear it and don't even know it exist?



Free speech is a field of trash which contains jewels of wisdom. Politically correct speech is just a field of trash. Censorship does have benefits. For the censors. Not for the people.I need help with my conclusion?
Sooo if your first 3 paragraphs are like sooo awesome why not just finish it yourself? You need to learn to lead by example - you claim to be a warrior fighting the downfall of the English language yet you begin using the word "Sooo" which does not exist. You also repeatedly misuse the word "awesome", you should look up the actual meaning of the word before you abuse the word. You also foolishly believe all this Osama bin Laden crap that the US Govt./CIA made up and you and many other millions of ignorant people around the world believe anything that they show on TV as the "whole truth" no matter how ridiculous. The reality is that you have all been brainwashed into oblivion and nothing can convince you otherwise (even the truth) - you naively sweep it under the carpet as just another "Nutthead Conspiracy Theory". Follow your own advice, you say: "No one wants to hear the truth anymore, which is why obesity is an epidemic, students are receiving W’s (warnings) instead of F’s, and we’re so intrigued by the fantasy world of Harry Potter books (the Danish aren’t the only ones)." If you are shown the truth regarding 9/11, Osama bin Laden, Al-Qaeda, the involvement of the CIA and British Intelligence, "The New World Order", Zionist Jews %26amp; Illuminati, etc... will you actually believe the "Truth" if it was revealed to you?